People please don't laugh reading this one.I wasn't serious while writing this.I was just in a mood and i myself didn't know that it would turn out into a poetry
someone in my dreams i see
simple,sober so very caring he would be.
someone who wud get me away frm this big,fast world around,
somewhere where only love and peace surrounds.
someone who wud hold every drop of my tear in his palms,
someone with whom u forget all ur pain, just being in his arms.
someone who would make me feel special like noone else would do,
someone for whom i would feel like sacrificing everything to.
someone who would read my eyes before words could say.
someone with whom life looks beautiful with every passing day.
someone who would be there in all my thoughts
someone life can't be imagined without.
I know that life is not a dream,
Not all dreams do always come true.
Still my heart so firmly believes,
someone somewhere is also made for u.
someone in my dreams i see
simple,sober so very caring he would be.
someone who wud get me away frm this big,fast world around,
somewhere where only love and peace surrounds.
someone who wud hold every drop of my tear in his palms,
someone with whom u forget all ur pain, just being in his arms.
someone who would make me feel special like noone else would do,
someone for whom i would feel like sacrificing everything to.
someone who would read my eyes before words could say.
someone with whom life looks beautiful with every passing day.
someone who would be there in all my thoughts
someone life can't be imagined without.
I know that life is not a dream,
Not all dreams do always come true.
Still my heart so firmly believes,
someone somewhere is also made for u.
4 comments:
Shruti, That carries a lot of emotions. I wonder, How nicely random thoughts got woven into words. You seems to be a true person and ofcourse a parent-lover.
Wish u all the best...
hey shruti...!!!
dats a real nice piece u hve drafted...!!!
its is so very intresting..n impressive...!!!
if its written jus by scribblin i wud call a genuinly pure pice of poetry...!!
i find myself rhyming words like u did but jus for fun....wat u hve put in here is smthng inspirational...!!!
good going gal....
the last para is so very emotional n motivating for sme1 innocent..!!
i wish u put in more of sch creations....
im already sendin this page's link to ma frnds n will ask em to pass it on so more n more ppl wud cme to knw abt this lovely collection of words....i dunn hve one word for ths collection....but m tryin to b as positive as i cn...!!!
bt yh.....hats off to u....
keep gng on and on and on....!!!!
:)
Goood attempt if its the first one.... my first poem was worse..... Keep writing n u would know how n what to write where...
Something is misssing in this poem.... probably the feel of ur words is missing....
But keep writing n u would come up with some classic all time hit poems...
N dont ever alter ur poems according to people's views.... Coz that will steal the poem from u.... N eventually the feel will be lost... Trust me i write poems too....
Its a goood try.... go ahead....
Amazing poem.
Hope you find someone like that :)
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